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The pictures show the process of making cherry jam. Describe the process

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The picture given depicts the process of making cherry
jam
. There are nine main stages, beginning with getting the
cherries
 from the tree and ending with putting them into jars. Having looked at the provided diagram for more details, it is obvious that in the first step, a sheet is spread on the ground, and the tree is shaken by special equipment to get the
cherries
.
Then
, the
cherries
 are collected and transported by trucks to the processing plant. The leaves and stems are removed. The
cherries
 are washed with clean water, and the stone is taken out of the middle of the cherry by metal spikes. After that, the
cherries
 are cooked and some extra ingredients
such
 as pectin, sugar, and lemon juice are added.
Next,
the quality of the
jam
 is checked and the
jam
 is put into jars.
Finally
, a label is stuck on the jars and the
jam
 is ready to consume.
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Introduction/Conclusion Enhancement
Ensure a clear and comprehensive introduction and conclusion, outlining the overall process and summarizing key stages or outcomes.
Logical Structure & Transitions
Organize your essay into distinct paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the process. Use clear transitional phrases to guide the reader through the stages.
Detailing Main Points
Support each stage of the process with specific details, such as the significance or the purpose of each step. Add descriptions that could help illustrate each stage more vividly.
Complete Task Response
Address all parts of the task by covering each stage mentioned in the diagram. Make sure to do so in a logical order, reflecting the actual process.
Sentence Structure and Clarity
Enhance clarity by carefully structuring sentences and varying sentence length and structure to improve readability and engagement.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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