You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Editor,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you about an article
which I read in an International travel magazine in which there is some wrong information
published related to my town
whose name is Gage Town
.
The article
is very interesting as it provides detailed information
related to our locality but there is some information
which is not correct. It is written about the history of the ancient museum which is located in the heart of the town
where we see the exhibition of old paintings of popular artist of Punjab Sobha Singh but you write the wrong name of the artist in your article
. There is some other information
which provides incorrect knowledge about the originating of the town
. The editor must provide the correct information
so readers will know the history of our locality.
I believe it is a good idea that you should visit my town
once so you will get the correct knowledge regarding every popular place in my area and you will publish another article
with the right information
. I thank you for publishing the article
of my town
in your magazine.
Yours Faithfully,
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure you not only identify the mistakes but also clearly explain why accurate information is vital, such as maintaining the town's integrity or influencing tourists' expectations accurately. Additionally, offering more specific suggestions on rectifying the issues would enhance your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, you could make your letter more logically structured by starting with a brief introduction to the issue, followed by a detailed explanation of the inaccuracies, and concluding with your suggestions for correction. Also, linking sentences and ideas more smoothly will help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
Language
Consider using a broader range of sentence structures and more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic to increase the variety and interest of your writing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite