In many countries, the number of animals and plant declining? Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved
The decline in the
number
of wild animals
and trees
cause
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causes
of
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problems
affecting to
the environment. In Change preposition
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this
essay, I will discuss about reasons which damage to the natural habitat
.
We live in an age when many of us are considering
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consider
affect
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that affect
the
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natural
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nature
is
unimportant, so we currently have many troubles Correct your spelling
as
about
the ecosystem Change preposition
with
such
as pollution, erosion and trash. There are a large number
of reasons to explain for
these Change preposition
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problems
, one
of them is the forest being damaged by citizens. In addition
. the number
of trees
has
been Wrong verb form
that have
cutted
per year is Correct your spelling
cut
cause
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caused
of
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by
flood
that Fix the agreement mistake
floods
make
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are
for
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to
animals
living around areas. Animals
have not
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no
abilities
to catch Fix the agreement mistake
ability
preys
because decrease in the amount of Fix the agreement mistake
prey
preys
from Fix the agreement mistake
prey
polutions
. Correct your spelling
pollution
For instance
, the Amazon forest has been
lost 30 Unnecessary verb
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percentage
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per cent of
trees
and animals
to compare
history, Verb problem
apply
that
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which
mean
more and more Change the verb form
means
creatures
are likely to become extinct.
As the
result, people Correct article usage
a
is
the main motivation that Change the verb form
are
make decline
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keeps
creatures
and trees
in the
natural Change the word
their
habitat
.
From my point of view, althought
we can solve Correct your spelling
although
this
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this problem
these problems
problems
by many methods, but
increasing abilities Correct word choice
apply
awarness
about natural security in public is the best solution. On account of helping Correct your spelling
awareness
defence
of decline in the Replace the word
defend
number
of animals
in habitat
need a long time to operation
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operate
while
if we defense
some issues that Replace the word
defend
currently
available, we can concentrate totally percent to solve Add a missing verb
are currently
problems
before. Therefore
, helping creatures
and trees
can be protected better than to compare with solving troubles and starting new one
. Correct pronoun usage
ones
For example
, Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
should make some Correct your spelling
government
restricts
and Replace the word
restrictions
abandones
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abandoned
about
the amount of waste from factories and vehicles. Change preposition
on
On the other hand
, trash also
be one
of the reason
that affect to ocean's Change to a plural noun
reasons
habitat
, so need
some restrictes to reduce the volume of rubbish Correct pronoun usage
there need
watse
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waste
to
the ocean.
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in
creatures
is delining
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are
be
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one
of the biggest difficulty
for the Fix the agreement mistake
difficulties
goverment
, so we need Correct your spelling
government
control
and solve reasons that affect Fix the infinitive
to control
to
the environment, Change preposition
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from
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apply
it
to protect the Correct pronoun usage
apply
animal's
environment.Change noun form
animals'
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