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some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution , others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #car-free #air #pollution
In
the
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modern life, international car-free
days
 role a vital play . It is
a
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 best choice to reduce pollution
as well as
 reduce accidents.
However
, some people suggest some other ways. I would argue that it is better
if
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having
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 suitable international
days
 which
banning
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 cars The option to have international car-free
days
 is attractive for several reasons.
Instead
 of having to see many vehicles moving on the road, we can have some
days
 to
enioy
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enjoy
 fresh air around and the air will become airy. Everyone can walk on the street or
hike
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 a bicycle for a holiday.
This
 will help their
heath
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 very much.
On the other hand
, some people think there are some better ways to dealing
this
 problem. Perhaps you think if the
goverment
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government
ban
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car
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 moving on the day, it will
be disrupt
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 the work order of many people.
For example
, if somebody
have
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 an urgent matter and they have to move a long distance so they don't have
car
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 or fast vehicles like
this
,
this
 will
be
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negative
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 impact on personal work. So we should
deployment
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 suitable car-free
days
.
For instance
 , on holidays or festivals because these
days
 are a duration when everyone
are
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 after a busy year.
This
 not only reduces air pollution but
also
 limits unfortunate accidents. For the reasons mentioned above, it seemed to me that if we have free-car
days
 which is suitable, we can create a better society.
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