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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households on one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting nd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households on one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting nd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graphs provide information about the percentage of possessed electrical appliances and the
time
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 spent on household
chores
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 from the beginning to the end of 1920-2019. Generally speaking, it is evident that as the proportion of electrical
appliances
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appliance
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usage
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 increased, the
time
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 allocated to household
chores
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 decreased. First of all,
thorughout
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throughout
 the
time
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 span from 1920 to 1940,
the
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apply
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houselhold
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household
chores
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 made by
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 had witnessed a drastic rise. Concurrently, the
usage
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 of washing machines and vacuum cleaners
also
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 increased proportionally. When it comes to the duration of 1940-1960, the proportion of
usage
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 refrigerators continued to hold its prominent place among other appliances, reaching 90
percent
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per cent
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. Meanwhile, there was a slight increase in the
usage
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 of washing machines and vacuum cleaners. In the
last
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 year of
this
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 period, in 1960, the amount of
time
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 spent on
chores
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 experienced a significant decline. During the 2000-2019 timeframe, the
usage
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 of washing machines reached approximately 70
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 the
usage
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 of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners reached their peak. Concurrently, the weekly
time
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 spent on housework decreased to ten
percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, chores, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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