The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares how families in one country spent their
money
in two
years
1968 and 2018 which are
fifty
years
apart.
Overall
, the most
money
had been spent on Food back to 1968. Weekly income which was spent on Household goods remained the same amount during these 50
years
. As mentioned, the most weekly income which was 35
percent
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, was
being
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spent on Food back
to
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in
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1968,
while
,
fifty
years
later,
this
amount halved in 2018. Income which was being spent on Housing was 10
percent
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in 1968
while
it doubled 50
years
later. Fuel and power was the lowest proportion in both 1968 and 2018.
According to
the bar chart, the
money
which was being spent on Clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
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was
one tenth
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of the total in 1968 and it halved to 5
percent
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in 2018. Household goods remained the same proportion in these
fifty
years
. The most
money
in 2018 was spent on Leisure. Transport
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also
rose after
fifty
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years, fifty with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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