Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals dwellers busy with own
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their
working
and others feel that it Replace the word
work
is improve
to work unique organization.
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is improved
is improving
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
working
Replace the word
work
also
it is very important because we should be always active own daily routine. Linking Words
As well as
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people is
Correct your spelling
people's
employing
. The main reason, personal growth is Replace the word
employment
an
essential.
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apply
explanation
, people Replace the word
explain
working
for Wrong verb form
work
comfortable
and beautiful life , Add an article
a comfortable
cause
they are hardworking and it is Correct word choice
because
a
valuable. Change the article
apply
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, Linking Words
which is
company is growing and Verb problem
the
improve
.
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improving
For example
, my mom Linking Words
is inspired
me because, she is Change the verb form
has inspired
astruancy
for work, my mom is my hero and she is confident .
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as truancy
truancy
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, work Linking Words
is give
an income to individuals, other Wrong verb form
gives
way
to give Fix the agreement mistake
ways
money
, without working, Use synonyms
for example
, playing Linking Words
green
card and Correct article usage
a green
play
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playing
lottery
. To Add an article
the lottery
explanation
, if you Replace the word
explain
play
Verb problem
get
green
card Correct article usage
a green
an
you Correct your spelling
and
will be
Verb problem
get
ticket
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the ticket
a ticket
for
foreign countries it is very good and you will be flying want to Change preposition
to
Correct article usage
the county
county
, if you Correct your spelling
country
will be
win the lottery , you will Verb problem
apply
be
a lot of Verb problem
earn
money
and you should Use synonyms
be begin
business. Change the verb form
begin
As a result
, you will be Linking Words
millionaire
person. Correct article usage
a millionaire
For example
, Linking Words
last
week my brother Linking Words
win
Wrong verb form
won
a
lottery so it Correct article usage
the
is
very Wrong verb form
was
excited
, we Replace the word
exciting
was
very happy and my brother Change the verb form
were
buying
a Wrong verb form
bought
favorite
car and we Change the spelling
favourite
have
more Wrong verb form
had
money
and we Use synonyms
traveled
Change the spelling
travelled
other
countries . It was so Change preposition
to other
wonderful
time.
In conclusion, each other people need more Correct article usage
a wonderful
money
and health for good life Use synonyms
also
individuals should be Linking Words
hardworking
so they Correct your spelling
hard working
are
don't Unnecessary verb
apply
forgot
Change the form of the verb
forget
family
and they need Correct pronoun usage
their family
spend
time with Fix the infinitive
to spend
family
it is enjoyable and warm emotions.Correct pronoun usage
their family
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Task Achievement
Clarify your introduction by clearly stating the topic and summarizing both viewpoints before stating your own. Try to use a more straightforward and precise sentence structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs more smoothly.
Task Achievement
Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that is supported by examples or evidence.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your conclusion recaps the discussion and clearly states your opinion. The conclusion should synthesize the information presented in the essay.
General
Work on grammar and spelling accuracy to improve clarity and understanding. Consider reviewing basic grammar rules and practicing writing sentences that are clear and error-free.
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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