Some people think that current environment issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government, while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some set of
people
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opine that
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it is
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the Government who should
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with the
environment
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environmental
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issues
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while
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other set of
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believe these
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also
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be taken care
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individual
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alone. In
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essay, we will discuss both the perspectives below and
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will share my opinion in the
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with, global warming
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are the major weather
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where only authorities can take care of them.
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environmental
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issues
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does
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not
limit
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to one city or country,
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beyond the boundaries where
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the single
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nation cannot handle
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.
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, countries should come together and sign a project on how to tackle
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problem globally.
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, Japan came up with
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a campaign
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like Project Green where multiple countries
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an agreement to work on reducing the carbon
foot prints
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footprints
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in their own countries and review it every year the results
acheived
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achieved
so far.
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, each person can
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his contribution to
solve
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this
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enviromental
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environmental
issues
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by reducing
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apply
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waste,
planting
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and planting
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trees in their own areas.
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,
people
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should focus on recycling paper and plastics.
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Furthermore
individuals can plan to commute via public
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transport
more
instead
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of their own car or motorcycle.
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, together we can reduce the pollution which
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results
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from waste and traffic to some extent. To reckon with, in my
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opinion,
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Government and individuals should work closely to reduce the impact of global warming in each country, as
people
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alone cannot deal with
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issues
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to a large extent. Together we can and together we will.
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coherence cohesion
There's a strong foundation, but refining your essay with clearer and more logically connected paragraphs would enhance your overall coherence and cohesion. Incorporate clearer transitions between ideas and ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Make sure the introduction more explicitly outlines the topics to be discussed, and ensure the conclusion neatly summarizes the main points and explicitly states your opinion.
task achievement
Your essay responds well to the task, but aim for a more comprehensive analysis. Provide more depth in discussing both viewpoints and include more diverse and specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and punctuation to ensure your arguments are clearly presented without distractions from minor errors.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global responsibility
  • environmental regulations
  • renewable energy
  • carbon emissions
  • sustainable businesses
  • grassroots movement
  • public transport
  • conserving water
  • environmental initiatives
  • policy change
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