Some people say that increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Vehicles
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are
important
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part of our life. Some individuals said that by increasing
price
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the price
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of
fuel
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fuel,
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we can reduce the problem of
pollution
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and
traffic
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.
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some are not agreed to it. I agreed with the first opinion and I will discuss both statements in
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paragraphs. On the one hand, if we increase
cost
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the cost
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of petrol
then
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it will definitely
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in reducing
pollution
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because
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due
to
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the overcost
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overcost
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over cost
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of gas
people
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will hesitate to
use
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vehicles
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for every single work as it affects their pocket which
also
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leads to less
traffic
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on
road
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. A survey conducted in 2000 in India,
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states that 90%
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people
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are using their motors for unnecessary work like if they have to go
one
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street to
other
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.
Pollution
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is
also
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big
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problem for our country as
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use
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the use
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of
vehicles
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are
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increasing day by day which creates
polllution
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pollution
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that is
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harmful
for
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to
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our
body
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bodies
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. If fuel gets expensive
then
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people
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reduce their
use
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of
vehicles
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by own which automatically
contribute
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contributes
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to less
pollution
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in the environment.
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,
increase
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an increase
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in
price
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the price
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of petrol is not only the solution to control
traffic
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and
pollution
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. They can educate
people
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about how they can contribute to the environment by planting new trees to protect our environment and how they can replace gas
vehicles
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with bicycles like they can
use
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cycles for small chores of
house
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. In my opinion, by doing expensive fuel we can decrease
pollutions
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pollution
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and
traffic
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to one extent. As we know
that
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apply
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people
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see the price of things before
buy
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it
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them
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.
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