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The graph shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK .

The graph shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK .
#patterns #access #technology #homes #uk
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 value of changing patterns of modern technologies in urban areas of
UK
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.
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, a mean quantity of gadgets respectively arose, contributing an enormous factor, that dwellers nowadays use more technologies, rather than
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 initial amount.
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 number of CD players
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 was abnormally highest
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 whole decade, which
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 exceeded 80% in 2002.
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 a
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necessity
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phone
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 was disturbing in
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 years,
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 final amount almost
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 to
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 number of CD players,
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 reaching approximately
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70%.Other gizmos,
such
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computer
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 and internet
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access
,
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 sharply increased , and
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 value of citizens with
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access
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 doubled up to 50% in
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 years. Unfortunately, a quotidian resident only had access to
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 in 1998, which was considerably
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 than other opponents. Home computers, steadily climbed from
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30%
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 to 60% in
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 period, which probably was in quandary, from 1996 to 1998, perhaps, it was almost at
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 rate.
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