In some place old age is valued, while in other culture youth is consider more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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digital world, society
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that senilities have
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role more than young
age
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future
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author believes that young
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development. It is easy to understand that, at the
age
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more creatively and industriously. Old techniques can be replaced by
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new methods, it
also
like
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, people always want the
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that require more creation and energy which always stay inside the adolescence. Youngsters often want to try new things and take some risks which lead to success
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their life.
For example
, Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of Facebook is the most successful entrepreneur when his achievement
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to him at the
age
of 19.
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that the younger often make mistakes
while
old
age
can avoid the problem and make
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decision.
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have more
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due to
their
age
, their old sweat
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they
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avoid
making
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fault
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and
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calmness
of
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them
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will build
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the
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belief
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everyone, that
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the leaders of countries usually are
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elder
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.
Nevertheless
, if the older can teach the youth their experiences and help them learn from their mistakes it will
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to build the truth from both generations. In
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, the
elder
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usually
easy to
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gain
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truth
by
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their
experienced
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and control in important
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,
although
that young
age
still
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a profound role that
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to
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the global future.

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