The pie charts below show the comparision of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

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The pie charts below represent information about types of energy production in France in two years.

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, it is evident that butter and margarine showed the biggest

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differences

between those years. To commence with the statistics of Margarine showed gradual fluctuation, which accounted for 140 grams in 1981.

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it fell in 1991 and comprised 100 and there was the same

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until 2007, which made up about 55,

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. When it comes to the opposite

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, which was statistics of Butter.

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it started in 1981 and made up approximately 97 grams and

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there was dropped in 1986, which accounted for 80.

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, which made up 100 until 2000 .

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, in 2001 the number

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about 80 and

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comprised 40 in 2007. It may be concluded from the pie chart that Margarine showed

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a fluctuation

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fluctuation

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fluctuating

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trend

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whereas

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Butter had the opposite

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The pie charts below show the comparision of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

It is more important for school children to learn about their local history than the world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

It is important for everyone , including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement.

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.