Nowadays, many people use the Internet to get medical advice instead of going to see a doctor. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It is true that technology has flourished by leaps and bounds in every field around the globe.
As a result
, these days,
people
obtain knowledge about
medical
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rather than visiting medical practitioners. Free consultation is the main reason for
this
phenomenon. I think it is a negative trend and
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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with,
internet
medical
advice
is full of free without paying any consultation fee
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doctor fee, so numerous populations like
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this
.
This
means all the public
are
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not in the same financial
situtaion
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situation
, so many struggle to pay the doctor fee to get
treatment
that's why individuals use
internet
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the internet
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for getting free
advice
from
internet
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and social media
such
as Facebook and Twitter.
For example
, in India, more than 40% of
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people
get free
advice
from the
internet
not only uneducated persons but
also
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educated ones. Needless to say, poverty is the key factor
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people
obtain
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free
advice
from the
internet
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.
Furthermore
, getting free
advice
and
treatment
from
internet
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can affect
people
's health adversely because online consultants are not professionals and they just tell any
treatment
by their experience but all
people
's health
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not in same. Everyone has a different health issue, so online
advice
might be wrong even
some
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persons may
died
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without proper medicines like doctors.
For instance
, in Sri Lanka, more than 60% of the dead cases
registered
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by using
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online
treatment
without going to see the doctors.
To conclude
,
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online medical
advice
is full of free cost so many
people
use
advice
from
this
without going to see the doctor.
However
, it brings more adverse
effect
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to the population namely
dead
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might
be happened
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for inappropriate medicines.
Therefore
, I think it is a negative
treatment
in the above-mentioned details.
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