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The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph and table provide data on the average temperatures and yearly sunlight
hours
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 in
London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, It can be seen that the temperatures in
London
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 and New
York
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 share the same patterns,
while
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Sydney
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 shows the opposite features completely.
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, the number of sunshine
hours
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 per year in New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 does not vary much, and
London
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 has the lowest figure for
the
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annual
hours
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. Regarding the first graph, at the beginning and end of the year, temperatures in New
York
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 and
London
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 alter
similarly
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, reaching their lowest points at 10 and 5, respectively.
In contrast
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,
Sydney
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 experiences the highest at around 25, the hottest time will fall
at the end
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 of the year. July is a typical month when witnessing remarkable temperature growth in both New
York
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 (30) and
London
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 (25),
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Sydney
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 plummets to its trough at 15.
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, in New
York
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 and
Sydney
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, annual sunlight
hours
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is
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 roughly equal at 2535 and 2473 respectively.
However
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,
London
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 experiences significantly fewer sunshine
hours
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, recording only 1158
hours
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 annually.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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