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In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and giv your opinion.

#places #age #cultures #youth #giv
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point
 in some
culture
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cultures
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 that
youth
 and old age which is more vital for the community. I totally agree with the view that the
youth
 play a crucial role in our world and
this
 author discusses both views given. beginning with the
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 about old age which says is more important. The elderly people have learned a lot so they must have acquired a large amount of knowledge and experience. They will hardly ever fail in their fields and will bring benefits
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finance.
However
,
as a result
 of being older and older, their ambition
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breakthrough
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 or their creativity can not be more fired than the
youth
 as they would be valued for just a short time.
While
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 the
youth
 may have
a
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better thinking
beacause
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because
 they open their mind to learn new things,
therefore
 young people can be helpful with providing leap ideas. Being young is a good condition
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 learning but it will take
along
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 time if there is nobody to teach them
otherwise
 they must have been self-taught. In conclusion, each
point
 has solid arguments and drawbacks. At my
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 believe that the
youth
 play a crucial role in
this
 world.
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task achievement
Ensure you thoroughly understand the task and address all parts of the prompt. Your essay should clearly discuss both views on the importance of youth and old age, then clearly articulate and support your own opinion.
task achievement
Work on developing clear, comprehensive ideas that are well supported by specific examples. This includes providing more detailed arguments and evidence for why the youth or old age might be considered more important in certain cultures.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay logically by using clear paragraphs for each new idea. Begin with an introduction that presents the topic and your thesis, then use each subsequent paragraph to explore a single point, and conclude with a summary of your arguments and opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the cohesion of your essay by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs. This will make your arguments easier to follow and strengthen your overall presentation.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and vocabulary. Using a wider range of vocabulary and grammar accurately can enhance the clarity and professionalism of your essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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