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Explain why you want to take time off work • Give details of the amount of time you need • Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#time #work #amount
Dear Sir or Madam, I have been working in
this
company
 for several years. Guests from different countries visit
this
company
.
Then
 there will be an offer of joint cooperation from various companies. I have always been in the service.
However
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However,
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 I never went on vacation. I even work on Saturdays and Sundays. I wanted to
rest
. Give me two weeks off to
rest
. Two weeks is enough time for me. During
this
 time, I will
rest
 comfortably. I will be with my family for a week. I will be
traveling
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travelling
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 for the
rest
 of the week. Thank you for giving me the day off. My work doesn't stop when I'm gone. Because I will put a worker in my place. That worker, like me, knows every language one hundred
percent
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per cent
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. He can communicate easily and has a good relationship with every person who visits the
company
. Don't worry,
this
 worker won't report his absence. Covers the
company
 well.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely Mokhinur
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task achievement
To improve your Task Achievement score, make sure your essay fully addresses all parts of the task. For instance, more explicit details about how your work will be covered during your vacation could enhance your score. Provide specific information on your colleague's qualifications and how they will handle your responsibilities.
coherence cohesion
To enhance Coherence and Cohesion, focus on organizing your essay more logically. Introduce your request more formally in the opening paragraph, discuss the details of your time off and how your work will be covered in separate paragraphs, and conclude with a polite request for approval. This structure aids the reader's understanding.
coherence cohesion
Utilize connective words and phrases to improve the flow of your essay. Words like 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', 'Moreover', to expand on points, and 'However', 'On the other hand', to show contrast, can significantly contribute to the coherence of your essay.
coherence cohesion
For a higher score in supporting your main points, consider providing more concrete examples or anecdotal evidence. For instance, mention a specific project or task that your proposed replacement has successfully completed in the past, proving their capability.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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