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Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched area is a necessity. Advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy security
  • rely on imports
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • exploration
  • extraction
  • technological advancements
  • environmentally sensitive
  • economic benefits
  • renewable energy projects
  • sustainable energy sources
  • environmental degradation
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • renewable energy technologies
  • transition
  • local communities
  • pollution
  • traditional way of life
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