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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
 is a bar chart explaining sales of journals per individual within five territories over
three
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a
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years
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three-year
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 period in 2003, 2005 and 2007. By and large,
country
 B transacted the largest portion in all three years next to.
On the other hand
, homey E had the least sales with
slight
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a slight
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 rise in 2005 followed by
country
 D. Looking into different countries,
country
 B and
country
 A competed over the three years
on reaching
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to reach
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 50 per individual with
slight
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a slight
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 rise
on
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in
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country
 B in
range
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the range
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 of 45 to 50 and
country
 A only below 40 in 2007.
Conversely
,
country
 E was less than 10 over the all duration.
While
,
country
 D surged in 2007 reaching above 20 per person, making it the highest year and 2003 was the lowest.
Country
 C was fluctuating
approximetly
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approximately
 30 to 35, greatest in 2003 and lowest in 2007. Making them have higher transactions in
country
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countries
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 D and E
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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