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Some people think that online reading materials are better for children. Others argues that traditional paper based resources are better. Discuss and give your opinion.

#people #materials #children #paper #resources
Work in progress (in the field of metrological support for the agro-industrial complex of the Russian Federation): a competition for the performance of the work was won and developed (co-authored) 'The concept of instrumentation and metrological support of the agro-industrial complex of Russia for the period up to 2010',
development
 of the 'Regulations on the metrological service of the agro-industrial complex of the Russian Federation', in the creation of model regions, participation in the
development
 of recommendations for the formation of laboratories of enterprises and organizations of the agro-industrial complex,
development
 of technical specifications, technical requirements for devices, methodological recommendations on metrological support of technical means, presentations at international conferences. Skills and achievements: the ability to present the material competently and in an accessible way, the ability to search and analyze information, work with technical documentation, prepare competitive applications, develop an industry
development
 strategy.
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task achievement
Your essay does not adhere to the topic provided. It's important to directly address the question and present arguments related to online reading materials and traditional paper-based resources for children. Refocus your essay to match the given topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction, body, and conclusion structure. Including these would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing. Introduce the topic in the first paragraph, discuss points related to online and traditional reading materials in the body, and conclude with your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Incorporate more focused points and examples relevant to the subject matter. Each paragraph should present an idea or argument about the benefits or drawbacks of online versus traditional reading materials, followed by specific examples or evidence.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenient
  • accessible
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • multimedia
  • portable
  • suitable
  • physical
  • tangible
  • visual
  • distracted
  • limited
  • versatile
  • screen time
  • critical thinking
  • comprehension
  • retention
  • digital literacy
  • environmentally-friendly
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