in some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. discuss both views and give your opinion

in some
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old people
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important because of their life
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.
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, in some
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youth
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valued cause their ideal of
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and
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.
This
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opinions. On the one hand,
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into the old individuals it is evident that their number of experiment
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higher than the others. It is evident that
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work they do always finish in
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short time
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they know how to do it well.
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, they do not have physical courage and their health
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to be not really well
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can despite them from doing something that they want.
On the other hand
, looking at the young individuals, it is evident that their
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point is the creativity and flexibility so they can have a lot of new and beautiful
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to finish their jobs.
However
, they do not have so much
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so maybe it can take them a lot of time
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their job.
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it can be seen that
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both
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young and old individuals in every country are all important.
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Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, it's crucial to organize your essay more logically. Start by introducing the topic and stating your thesis clearly. Then, use separate paragraphs for each viewpoint, ensuring a clear topic sentence at the beginning of each paragraph. Transition words such as 'firstly', 'on the other hand', and 'finally' can help in making the progression of ideas smoother and more connected.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, ensure you fully address all parts of the prompt. This includes discussing both views thoroughly and giving your own opinion clearly. Expand your discussion by including more detailed examples and explanations to support your points. Try to make your opinion distinct by dedicating a separate paragraph to it, clearly stating why you hold that opinion based on the discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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