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In some countries, people are purchasing fewer new items and more second-hand goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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The market for used goods is gaining popularity, evident from the mushroom growth of offline and online stores
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 in second-hand goods.
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 my opinion,
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 and is driven by several reasons.
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 look into the advantages that support my viewpoint. There are numerous reasons for shopping
second hand
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products
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. The first reason is saving money. Buying a used
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 will
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 50
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 less than buying a new
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.
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, people now understand that purchasing a quality branded
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 which is used is much better
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 purchasing a new one of inferior quality. There are plenty of
products
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 available in
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the market
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 that have been used only once or a few times,
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 as designer outfits worn once by celebrities. These are now accessible to ordinary people at affordable rates.
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, the availability of user-friendly apps and websites
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communication between
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the seller
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 and buyer easier,
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 fostering the growth of
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the used
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product
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 market. Social media platforms
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 as Facebook have
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 influenced the widespread acceptance of used
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. Information on the availability of
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, pictures and
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cost
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 is at our fingertips, thereby providing diverse options for customers. Shopping for used
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product
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products
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 is definitely a positive
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, especially for
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the environment
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, as
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increase
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reusability
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the reusability
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 of goods and diminishes waste. The pollution is
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 decreased as the demand for manufacturing new
products
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 is reduced. Another significant advantage is for the seller, as they can gain at least half the price for the good that they no longer require.
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, people who are from less affluent backgrounds can afford basic amenities if they rely on used
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. To summarize,
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on
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cost
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 saving, affordability and technology influence are the major
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reasons
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 for the increasing
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 in used
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sale
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.
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 growth is highly beneficial for
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sellers
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,
buyer
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buyers
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 and
for
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the environment in terms of profitability,
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 savings and reusability.
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Consider including a clearer introduction and conclusion that succinctly outline your essay's main argument and final stance. This makes your essay more cohesive and easier to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure logical sequencing of your ideas by using more varied transitional words and phrases to smoothly guide the reader from one point to the next.
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In your essay, while you have responded to the prompt, try to develop your main points with more specific examples that vividly illustrate each reason or benefit you mention. This will enhance the completeness of your response.
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Strive for a balanced discussion by considering and briefly mentioning potential downsides, even if your stance is overwhelmingly positive, to provide a more rounded perspective on the topic.
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