Write about the following topic: Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
No
one
can deny the bad Use synonyms
effect
of eating Fix the agreement mistake
effects
junk
Use synonyms
food
nowadays on both members and society. Use synonyms
While
some people Linking Words
argues
that the Change the verb form
argue
government
should take Use synonyms
taxes
from fast Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
shops
, others think Use synonyms
that is
an important and cruel deed. In my opinion, I Linking Words
am totally agree
that the Change the verb form
totally agree
government
should force Use synonyms
taxes
on Use synonyms
junk
Use synonyms
food
. In the following lines, I will discuss both opinions.
On the Use synonyms
one
hand, the Use synonyms
government
should require some Use synonyms
taxes
on fast Use synonyms
food
. Use synonyms
One
main Use synonyms
reasons
for doing Change to a singular noun
reason
that is
Paying Linking Words
taxes
will increase the Use synonyms
price
of Use synonyms
this
type of Linking Words
food
. Use synonyms
In other words
, people will not be encouraged to buy it because Linking Words
Change preposition
of it’s
it’s
high Correct your spelling
its
price
. Use synonyms
For example
, If Linking Words
some
Correct your spelling
someone
one
wants to buy a KFS meal, it will cost double Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
it’s
real Replace the word
its
price
after adding Use synonyms
taxes
. Another reason is that the money Use synonyms
that is
collected from unhealthy Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
shops
can be used for preparing healthy meals for students in schools. Use synonyms
That’s
Unnecessary verb
That
mean
that the Correct subject-verb agreement
means
government
will use Use synonyms
this
money for other essential projects that can help both Linking Words
individual
and society. Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
For instance
, Schools will Linking Words
given
money to buy some fruits and give them to students during the school day.
Change the verb form
give
be given
On the other hand
, Heavy Linking Words
taxes
on unhealthy Use synonyms
food
will lead to some problems. Use synonyms
Firstly
, It is Linking Words
un fair
to force Correct your spelling
unfair
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
shops
to pay fat Use synonyms
tax
because they have many duties towards the place they work in and the workers at the same time. To indicate Use synonyms
this
point, taking Linking Words
Use synonyms
tax
will increase unemployment number and will lead owners to close their Correct article usage
a tax
shops
. Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
Many
workers can’t cook by themselves and they need to buy meals Fix capitalization
many
with
reasonable Change preposition
at
Use synonyms
price
.Fix the agreement mistake
prices
In other words
, It is Linking Words
un fair
Correct your spelling
unfair
fir
customers to cost the Correct your spelling
for
tax
.
In conclusion, It is better to force Use synonyms
reasonable
Add an article
a reasonable
tax
on Use synonyms
junk
Use synonyms
food
in order to encourage people to replace it with healthy Use synonyms
food
. I strongly Use synonyms
recommended
Wrong verb form
recommend
this
attitude as Linking Words
cope
with saving other alternative solutions for daily Change the verb form
coping
worker
.Fix the agreement mistake
workers
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