In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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time. Cashless economics is
the
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important aspect of
modern
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world, online
payment
and
transaction
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will make
lifes
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lives
easy and transparent. Cards and smart devices will play a
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significant
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up the lengthy ways of recording and counting
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the
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transactions. Many wouldn't be
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with
this
change
due to
lack of education and
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. I strongly believe that digitalization is important to make things faster and
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. Maintaining
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in
businesses
is a
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job
,
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requires qualified and reliable pupils. Evaluate systems of security and proper safety measures have to be undertaken if
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cash
is used in the
businesses
,
on the other
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if digital
payment
modes are used in the
businesses
then
less operation cost is required in the handling of
cash
affairs, thereby attention is mainly focus on the main activity of the business. For suppose the company or shop selling computer devices will
then
focus mainly on the equipment marketing rather
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supervising the
cash
proceeds. It will make much
relaxing
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for the business to reduce the
overall
cost of the operation, resulting increase in their profits and marketing of their products. Switching from
old
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tradition of
payment
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new
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one will be a problem for a group of people. There are
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of society which still believe that proceeds should
be make
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in
cash
. Lack of awareness is the main problem, workshops should be done to
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the benefits of digital
payment
. But a group of people
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doesn't
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would
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its
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income to be taxed will likely
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click
to
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the smart
payment
modes.
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, online
payment
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are good for
the
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businesses
and people at large to ease their
life
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in recording and maintaining
the
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cash
records. Digital
payment
modes will bring all the
segment
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segments
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of
the
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society
in
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tax
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net to ensure that every individual is contributing towards the economy at large.
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  • convenient
  • efficiency
  • reduce crime
  • tangibility
  • privacy
  • limited access to technology
  • job losses
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