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which are often showcased in a detailed in a direct way, unlike some written descriptions of it.

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As far as I am concerned,if someone
are
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 really
intrested
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interested
 in foreign cultures,
then
 the most efficient and direct
way
 to realise them is to visit and spend holidays for a couple of weeks there.To illustrate,visitors can have a variety of activities like having fun in tourist attractions,visiting exhibitions of local museums,communicating with local residents,tasting street food,buying some handmade crafts and their traditional clothes and so on.During
this
 process,tourists will be provided meticulous information about the various cultures,traditions,
cuisines
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and cuisines
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 of
this
 nation,and have a deed
unerstanding
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understanding
 of its brilliant historical and cultural heritage.What’s more,
traveling
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 is not only a good
way
 to escape from
fast-paced
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 and sedentary lifestyle temporarily
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but
also
 a perfect method of relaxation to relieve stress and anxiety in touch with nature.
This
 means
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it can exert
positive
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 effect on our mental and physical health. A country’s culture is established on the basis of humanity,including language,architecture,delicacy,
costum
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custom
costume
,habitude,etc.In
this
 case,only when
people
 contact and build relationships with locals,they will really get to learn their culture.
On the contrary
,if they just study it through indirect ways,
such
 as books,films and
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the internet
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internet
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,the
informations
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information
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 they get will be plain and incomplete compared with reality.Apart from that,some cultural introductions are normally quite general
that
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 a lot of details and obscure aspects are easily overlooked.
Therefore
,
people
 can only get relatively basic and rough
informations
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 without travel. Certainly,there might be some advantages in terms of realizing other countries through indirect methods,many
people
 believe
this
 can improve access to realizing world for these
people
 who are restricted by realistic conditions,
for example
,the lack of time and money,physical inconvenience,language barrier and so on.
This
 might be so,but I am convinced that
traveling
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 is still necessary and the only
way
 that the
realife
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real-life
 of a country is showcased in a detailed and direct
way
, unlike some written descriptions or
vedios
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videos
 of it.It can not only
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 a deep imprint on
people
’s
mind
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minds
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,
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but
also
 provide detailed and complete learning of culture and unique life
experience
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experiences
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 which could never gained through
internet
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the internet
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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