The chart below shows the results of a survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK in 2007.

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The pie chart compares the proportion of five certain reasons which led to poor school attendance in a survey in the UK in the year 2007.

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, what stands out from the diagram is that

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less parental involvement

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work and shortage of discipline in schools was recorded as the main factors of

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issue, upbringing ranked

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among the five ones. With regard to the diagram, it is apparent that both parents working had the highest share with 40%,

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a lack of school discipline was the other main factor which caused

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issue, ranking second with 25%.

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, shifting the focus to the rest, it is obvious that peer group pressure and bullying were responsible for nearly the same share with a little less than 20%.

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, as given in the graph, upbringing was the least significant factor which affected the attendance of students with 5%.

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The chart below shows the results of a survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK in 2007.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative