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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts and tables presented information regarding
police
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the police
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budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in one part of Britain.
While
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 the table pinpointed the sources of
money
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, the pie charts illustrated the
money
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 distribution. The police
budget
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 was categorised under the groups of national government, local taxes and other sources,
whereas
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 the cost of
money
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 was divided into salaries, technology
and
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apply
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buildings and transport. In an overview of 2 years, the
budget
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 shot up whilst the
money
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 spent still remained distinct groups. The 2017 to 2018 police
budget
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 encountered an upward trend from 304.7
million
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 to 318.6
million
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. There was an increase of approximately 2.3
million
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 for
national
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the national
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 government. Local taxes raised from 91.2
million
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 to 102.3
million
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, witnessing a dramatic surge of
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an estimatedly
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estimatedly
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estimated
 11
million
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 pounds.
Lastly
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, it can be seen that there
a
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slight addition of 0.5
million
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. Regarding the sources of expenditure, the category of salaries for officers and staff remained as the largest
propotion
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proportion
. Despite a 7% drop in salaries, from
three-fourth
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three-fourths
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 to 69%, it appeared to be an
addition
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additional
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 rise of 7% for technology. For the remaining 17%, buildings and transport maintained the same percentage.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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