In some places old age is valued, while in othr cultures youth is considered more importnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In certain nations, the interests of elderly
people
are prioritized over younger generations. In my opinion, although
young people
are important for economic reasons, valuing an older population is a revealing commitment to human dignity.
Those who value the youth in a nation argue they form a country’s economic base. There is little doubt that the majority of all workforces globally are comprised of young adults and middle-aged citizens. The average working age in nearly all industries is around 30. Young people
have the energy, passion, and motivation to work hard and achieve not only for the good of society but also
to establish a higher standard of living for themselves and their families. It is therefore
logical that governments should ensure younger generations have ample access to education and the resources needed to become contributing members of society. They will contribute the most in all likelihood.
However
, human progress is about more than simply utilitarian benefits. In the past, it might have been necessary for human civilization to cruelly neglect older populations when they were fighting wars and resources were scarce. That is
no longer the situation. Most countries, even developing ones, can now afford to provide healthcare for all citizens and some degree of retirement support. By undertaking these kindnesses, humans distinguish themselves clearly from their basest and most animalistic instincts. This
can be understood as the surest sign that humanity is an evolved species culturally, socially, and emotionally and trumps any materialistic concerns related to growing already mature economies.
In conclusion, though there are utilitarian reasons to support youth movements, it is more important and principled to value older people
. This
is already done in some cultures but should be more widespread.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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task achievement
While you've discussed both views and given your opinion, which is great for task achievement, consider also providing more specific examples and evidence to support your claims. This will make your arguments more persuasive and your completion of the task more comprehensive.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite