Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
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governments
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apply
medicine
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countries
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poorest
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the Sri
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apply
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apply
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died
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died
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in other
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from any
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drug organizations
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the price
medicine
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prices
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diseases
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financial situation and Correct your spelling
their
company
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the company
also
no
need to reduce Add a missing verb
has no
price
there products .
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the price
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