Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
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people's
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because
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apply
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governments
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country
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countries
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poor
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poorest
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Sri
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the Sri
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for
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apply
the
free of charges for health facilities.Correct article usage
apply
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possible
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died
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people
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die
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died
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in other
other poor
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another poor country
other poor countries
country
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charges
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charge
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from any
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people
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were unable
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diseases
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was die
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died
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drugs organization
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drug organizations
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price
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the price
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reduce
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are reduced
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price
product quality will go down,Fix the agreement mistake
prices
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diseases
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government
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people
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are not
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financial situation and Correct your spelling
their
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company
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the company
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has no
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price
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the price
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