As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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fast-paced technology, vehicle
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is experiencing
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which causes the roads to be restructured
along
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while
spending
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amount of money. There
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a thought that
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drivers themselves should pay for
expense
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of
roads
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repairing
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while
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such
actions. On the one hand, some groups of
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assume that not all the
people
who are living in a city drive on the road
therefore
; those who are involved must cover the payment. They justify that if
government
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pay for it, their paid tax is included in it and that
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illogical. They
also
think if
driver
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themselves pay for it , they will try to be more careful about the road and redesigning and restructuring will not be so costly for the entire country.
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, they suppose that government should not accept the burden of every single expense, rather they can share it with stakeholders.
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believes infrastructure expenses are for the government to care of and
people
have no role in it except for efficient
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.
For instance
, it is not feasible for
people
to cover these tremendous expenses even if they are content to do so. Every single country has some defined duties in front of its
people
which are being expected to be conducted in a proper manner. We can consider constructing chain department stores or hospitals
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that
people
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no capability. All in
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governments are always
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for unpredicted expenses and can provide the
fund
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for it. in conclusion, I understand some
people
who believe that road system
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be raised from among its users, but it seems more natural and plausible to me that states take
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responsibility
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its
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own studied methods.
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