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Many countries increase the amount of household garbage going to landfill every year. What are the causes and what can be done to reduce it?

#countries #amount #household #garbage #landfill #year
Great
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 number of states mounting their home
waste
 transfer to
landfill
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landfills
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 these years.
This
 essay will discuss two main reasons including lack of
knowledge
 in
people
 and incorrect method of producing
bags
.
This
 essay will
also
suggests
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 solutions
such
 as
rising
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raising
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 the information in society
along with
correct
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the correct
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 way of producing
bags
. On the one
hand
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hand,
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 wrong way of producing
bags
increase
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increases
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 the
amount
 of
waste
 in
country
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the country
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 and
on the other hand
 lack of
knowledge
 about
impact
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the impact
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 of
it’s
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 application lead to doubling the
amount
 of garbage. Public
people
 definitely do not have sufficient information about how disastrous it can be to mount garbage and
government’s
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the government’s
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 wrong policies in terms of
bags
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 utilization absolutely amplify
it’s
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its
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amount
.
For instance
,
people
 are not aware of what kind of harm is being done to
environment
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the environment
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 and companies are not aware
what
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of what
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 sort of
bags
 they are producing.
Overall
,
knowledge
 and correct
method
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methods
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 of production can help regarding
this
 issue. Boosting public
knowledge
 and amending policies can help to solve
this
 issue. Media play
the
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 significant role
to improve
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in improving
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knowledge
.
Also
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 policies
of
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for
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 producing some objects
such
 as
bag
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bags
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 should be revised by governments and companies.
For example
, if
people
 know about
consequences
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the consequences
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 of adding
waste
 to nature they will not destroy their habitat anymore.
This
also
 is applicable
about
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to
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 companies which
producing
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produce
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 plastic
bag
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bags
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instead
 of paper
bag
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bags
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. In general, there is a need for
right
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 culture for every right
steps
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step
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 to be taken and human
being
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beings
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 will follow
the
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apply
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efficient
decision
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decisions
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. In conclusion, we understand that
huge
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a huge
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amount
 of
waste
 is being produced in all countries nowadays.
This
 essay discussed the prominent cause of
this
 issue and provided two solutions to work it out.
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Task Achievement
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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