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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work and a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter, -Explain why you want to do voluntary work -State what your skills and experience are -Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long

#english #country #work #company #expeditions #trips #-explain #-state #skills #-indicate #volunteer
Dear Sir or Madam, The main reason why I am addressing you
to
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about
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 voluntary
,
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 because I want to
volunteer
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 I live in an English city. Actually, first of
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from
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 my opinion,
this
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need
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for volunteer
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volunteer
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volunteers
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 in the city where I live. Because I love
this
 profession and it is very helpful for many people. I like to help a lot of citizens. In general, I do not need
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 money. I do not to praise myself and I have the ability
of
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volunteer
. Because I am not interested in money.It does not take much to work as a
volunteer
 after all. I
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 to
volunteer
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about
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a long time. I think I have to work
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or 2 years.It is not that bad when I take it
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all- of
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 course we just save the economy Yours faithfully, Dilnura Khalmuradova
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Task Achievement
Focus on addressing all parts of the task directly and clearly. Your letter missed key details such as explaining why you want to do voluntary work, stating your specific skills and experience, and indicating where and for how long you want to volunteer.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea. For instance, one paragraph for explaining your desire to volunteer, another for detailing your skills and experience, and a third for stating your preferred location and duration.
Task Achievement
Use a more formal tone suitable for writing to an organization. Phrases like 'from my opinion' could be replaced with 'in my opinion', and avoiding contractions (such as 'I do not' instead of 'I don't') would make your letter sound more professional.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your letter has a proper opening and closing. 'Dear Sir or Madam,' is a good start, but make sure to sign off more formally, reflecting the seriousness of your application, such as 'Yours sincerely, [Your Name]'. Also, check and correct any grammatical errors to improve clarity and professionalism.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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