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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people believe that anyone can create art, such as painting, poetry, music, etc. Others think that a person should have special abilities to create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words

#minutes #people #anyone #art #poetry #music #person #abilities
It is no secret that
art
 is the main source of inspiration to express
feeling
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 and transmit values.In today’s climate, there is a debate regarding the
fundamental
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fundamentals
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 of creating
art
.
While
 some people argue that
art
 does not need any specific ability, another group, including me, believes that individuals need to be talented to be
an
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apply
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artist
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artists
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. The main justification why a group of people claims that
everyone
 can
creat
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create
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 artistic works is the fact that it does not need any special education.
In other words
, anyone can learn
art
 from different sources like YouTube or Instagram.
Besides
, most of them do not need professional
facalities
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facilities
. An illustration of
this
 fact is poetry since poets can write a poem even
in
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 a bus on a piece of paper. Another explanation is that it is not limited to a specific age. Every
individuals
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 in
differnt
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different
 age groups can be a renowned artist.
For example
, J.K Rowling the
famouse
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famous
 British author wrote her novel when she was in her
fourties
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forties
 and had two kids.
Therefore
, there is no boundary in
art
 and
everyone
 can do it. The other side of
argument
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 believes that
everyone
 can paint or play
piano
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the piano
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 but they are not creating
art
. As an example, anyone can do a simple summation but they are not
mathematician
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a mathematician
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. Nowadays, parents encourage their kids to participate in
art
 classes,
however
, just a few of them pursue
art
 professionally.
Last
 but not least,
art
specially
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 painting and poetry
need
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needs
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 a strong
sence
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sense
science
 and imagination which
everyone
are
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is
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 not blessed with. It is obvious that artists can imagine plans for their work inside their mind which ordinary people are not able to do like
the
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in the
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 Game of
thrones
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 series which the author connected the
detailes
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details
in
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at
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the story with the
last
 part. What can be concluded from the discussion revolving around
artist’s
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artists’
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 abilities is that it seems rational to subscribe to the view that
art
 is
a
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an
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ability demanding
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ability-demanding
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 topic.
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coherence cohesion
Work on presenting your ideas more logically and clearly. Ensure your essay has a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for introduction, each argument, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate a wider range of cohesive devices and synonyms to enhance the flow of your essay and avoid repetition.
task achievement
Fully address the prompt by discussing both views comprehensively and providing a clearer, more explicit statement of your own viewpoint.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your arguments. This adds weight to your claims and makes your essay more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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