In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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research
activity has been funded and operated by private
companies
.
Although
the process may consume an effective amount of
time
, it actually can restrain
the
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knowledge
and
information
delivery. Considering those points, I do believe that the disadvantage outweighs the advantage. The authority of
private
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sector to fund and conduct
research
resulting in
a
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time
efficiency. Notably, it is because researchers do not have to deal with a complicated bureaucracy to do their
research
activity. From my undergraduate experiences, the amount of
time
for the private
companies
to accept my funding proposal for
research
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, alongside with the
compeletion
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completion
of activity only took less than two
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because they
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to briefly acknowledge the
research
findings,
while
in the same case, it can
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more than five months with the government-affiliated
companies
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since they
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the
research
process.
Nevertheless
, since the government already issued specialised regulations to overcome
this
problem, I believe it will no longer
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.
On the other hand
, the domination
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private
companies
in scientific scrutiny potentially
restrain
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the delivery of
knowledge
and useful
information
. It is because the majority of them will keep the
research
findings for their own purposes rather than
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the public
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, resulting in a potential
knowledge
discrepancy. Take,
for example
, the cutting-edge
research
about hybrid vehicles from Bakrie
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disclosed and confidential from public access because their affiliated funding company
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them to not share the results.
Thus
, I think that drawback can cause
a
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great concern, as it brings inequality in getting novel
knowledge
and
information
. In conclusion, notwithstanding
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the fact that private
companies
can be efficient in
time
, I think the disadvantages still cause a great
significane
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significance
significant
than
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benefit
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because
it
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can limit the public consumption
on
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knowledge
and
helfpul
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helpful
information
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • groundbreaking technologies
  • efficiently allocate resources
  • innovative projects
  • strict timelines
  • profit motives
  • basic research
  • commercial application
  • corporate funding
  • biases in research
  • unbiased exploration
  • balanced exploration
  • public sector
  • private sector
  • synergy
  • comprehensive outcomes
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