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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summariset h e information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summariset h e information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how many minutes were spent on telephone calls in three different categories between 1994 and 2001 in the UK. Units are measured in billions.
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, throughout the
period
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 Local calls were dominated,
while
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 the rate was for mobile.
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Also
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it is clear that
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 the gap between categories shrank after half of the
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. Regarding the Local-fixed line, despite the increase to the half of given
period
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, the figure returned to the start indicated.There was a gradual increase with just under 75
billion
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 to about 90
billion
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 from 1994 to 1998, respectively.
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,it saw a slight decrease to about 70
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 by 2001.
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, the popularity of national and international calls rose steadily during the
period
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, climbing from approximately 35
billion
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 minutes utilized
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them
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to 60
billion
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 in 1994 for the former and 2001 for the latter. Focusing on mobile phones, the number of minutes spent on
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 form of telecommunication was roughly 2
billion
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 in 1994, the lowest figure in all given years.The figure for it experienced considerable growth reaching 12
billion
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 in 1998.The mobile calls rocketed to finish at around 44
billion
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 in 2001
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