Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
These days, some people say that shopping in different countries
are
becoming more similar when there Correct subject-verb agreement
is
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
less
Correct quantifier usage
fewer
different
in Replace the word
differences
products
around the world. Some people think this
cause
negative effects, Change the verb form
causes
while
the
others do not agree with that opinion. I believe Correct article usage
apply
this
is such
a bad development, and in this
essay, I will talk about my opinion and provide my own evidences
.
First of all, I think that modern Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
malls
around the world are replacing the traditional markets. To compare, a market often
bigger than a mall, which Add a missing verb
is often
take
more time to Change the verb form
takes
shopping
around and Change the verb form
shop
make
it less convenient than Change the verb form
makes
malls
. This
lead
to the fact that youngsters prefer the Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
malls
because it help them save their time. This
situation caused the
decrease in Correct article usage
a
number
of local stores and conventional markets, which Change the article
a number
the number
is
the main Correct subject-verb agreement
are
source
that provide local Fix the agreement mistake
sources
products
and improve the variety of choices for customers. For example
, in my city, the old Bien Hoa market are
having a decrease in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Correct article usage
the numbers
numbers
of sellers, because of the Fix the agreement mistake
number
dominant
of new Replace the word
dominance
malls
.
Secondly
, the poor variety of products
means local supplies are being underrated than imported resources. Just imagine that you have your own garden that produce
every kind of Change the verb form
produces
vegetables
that you need for your daily needs, but you still decide to buy that same kind of vegetable from an outside store, which is probably a waste of time and money. Fix the agreement mistake
vegetable
For example
, according to
a
research on 5,000 people from Ho Chi Minh Remove the article
apply
city
, 76% of them say that they prefer imported foods and appliances because they believe Capitalize word
City
foreigners
Replace the word
foreign
products
have higher quality.
To conclude
, my opinion is customers can
buying the same Verb problem
apply
products
worldwide is an unpositive change, because it lower
the profit of conventional local stores and supplies.Change the verb form
lowers
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