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The line chart below illustrates the amount of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010. Overall, all of the nations presented had seen the increase in that number.

The line chart below illustrates the amount of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010. Overall, all of the nations presented had seen the increase in that number.
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The line graph represents the number of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 different
countries
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 over the
period
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 from 1995 to 2010. Units are measured in the millions.
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, it is clear from the graph that all five
countries
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 increased through the
period
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 given. As can be seen from the graph, during the
period
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 all the
countries
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 increased end of the
period
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 that was given. In the beginning, in 1995 the USA began with 70
million
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tourists
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arrival
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 and started to
increase
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 over the
period
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 that showed and hit a peak of approximately 90
million
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.
while
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 France experienced 30
million
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tourists
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 in 1995. In the following years it steadily grew and end of the
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 it became the same as the USA and had the same result with under 90
million
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 The other 3
countries
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 remained the lowest
increase
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 until 2010. The figure for Malesia's first 10 years showed a small
increase
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, after, In 2005 it illustrated an
increase
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 until the end of the year with 40
million
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tourists
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.
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, Brazil and Egypt provided the same results until 2000 next year Egypt overtook Brazil rest the years and Egypt reached under 20
million
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tourists
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 but Brazil rose to above 10
million
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tourists
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