The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017.

The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017.
The table compares information about the
number
of new
students
who enrolled in
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of
Manchester
over 3 different years (1937,1967,2017).
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,
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manchester
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has become more popular and global. In 1937, the
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students
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of
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Manchester
was( 327)which is much lower than the
number
of
students
(1133) who enrolled
to
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in 1967.
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,the
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proportion
of female
students
who enrolled
to
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in 2017 was (55%)
from
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the total
number
(6254).
Also
,the proportion of female
students
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manchester
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in 1937 is much higher than the proportion of female
students
(35%)who enrolled
to
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in 1967. The highest proportion of
students
who came from within 40 miles of
Manchester
enrolled
to
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was 55% in 1937.
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