Poverty is a problem that affects the majority of children these days. Discuss the effects of poverty on society and suggest some solutions to this problem.

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poverty
is one of the most
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important
issues
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that thastthe
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thastthe
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a
commuinty
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community
face
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,which
effects
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affects
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a lot of
people
escepisially
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especially
children
.
this
problem
should be solved
a
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as
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soon as possible before it gets bigger and larger.In
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i
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well
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will
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suggest some solutions
might
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that might
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reduce the effect of
this
issue.
It is clear that
poverty
become one of
biggest
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the biggest
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issues in the world.In order to
minemize
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minimise
the effect of
this
problem
,
the
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society
should
oragnaize charties
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organise charities
and spread
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apply
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awareness among the
people
that they should help
the
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poor
people
by donating clothes and money to needy
people
.
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,
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poverty
will lead
people
to
do
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commit
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crimes that they to do it
due to
their
need
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needs
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and
children
.
furthermore
,
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the Goverment
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Goverment
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government
should
take
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make
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important
rule
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rules
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on solving
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to solve
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this
issue in order to reduce the rate of crimes that
happened
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occur
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by poor
people
due to
their need and help their own
people
.
This
can be happened by providing
jop oppiortunities
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job opportunities
to needy
people
also
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and also
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by
organaize
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organize
organized
awareness
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
to
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for
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the
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apply
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society
of
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about
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the
dangrouses
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dangerous
that might
caused
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cause
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be
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poverty
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by poverty
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.As
result
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a result
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of that,
the
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society
will be
much
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a much
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more
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apply
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better place for
children
.
On the other hand
,
however
,it makes the assumption that the
goverment
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government
will do it for free. In conclusion.
society
and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
preform
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perform
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the key to
solve
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solving
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this
problem
and
takes
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take
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responspilty
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responsibility
of
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for
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the
poverty
people
escepisially
children
,
who their
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whose
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lives could be ruined because of
this
problem
.
This
can be done
be
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by
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organaizing
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organising
charities and
awarenerss campaings
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awareness campaigns
to
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for
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the
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apply
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society
in order to reduce the consequences of the
poverty
issue.
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