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Poverty is a problem that affects the majority of children these days. Discuss the effects of poverty on society and suggest some solutions to this problem.

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Nowdays
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poverty
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 is one of the most
imortant
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important
 issues
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that thastthe
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thastthe
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a
commuinty
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community
face
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faces
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,which
effects
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affects
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 a lot of
people
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escepisially
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especially
children
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.
this
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problem
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 should be solved
a
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as
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 soon as possible before it gets bigger and larger.In
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essay
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i
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I
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well
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will
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 suggest some solutions
might
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that might
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 reduce the effect of
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 issue.
It is clear that
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poverty
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 become one of
biggest
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the biggest
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 issues in the world.In order to
minemize
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minimise
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problem
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,
the
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society
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 should
oragnaize charties
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organise charities
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the
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awareness among the
people
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 that they should help
the
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apply
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poor
people
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 by donating clothes and money to needy
people
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.
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,
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poverty
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 will lead
people
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 to
do
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commit
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 crimes that they to do it
due to
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 their
need
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needs
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 and
children
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.
furthermore
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,
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the Goverment
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Goverment
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government
 should
take
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make
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important
rule
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rules
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on solving
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to solve
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this
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 issue in order to reduce the rate of crimes that
happened
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occur
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 by poor
people
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due to
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 their need and help their own
people
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.
This
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 can be happened by providing
jop oppiortunities
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job opportunities
 to needy
people
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also
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and also
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 by
organaize
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organize
organized
awareness
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
to
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for
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the
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apply
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society
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of
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about
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 the
dangrouses
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dangerous
 that might
caused
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cause
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be
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apply
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poverty
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by poverty
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.As
result
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a result
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 of that,
the
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society
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 will be
much
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a much
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more
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apply
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better place for
children
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.
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,
however
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,it makes the assumption that the
goverment
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government
 will do it for free. In conclusion.
society
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 and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
preform
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perform
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 the key to
solve
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solving
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this
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problem
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 and
takes
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take
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responspilty
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responsibility
of
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for
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 the
poverty
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people
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 escepisially
children
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,
who their
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whose
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 lives could be ruined because of
this
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problem
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.
This
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 can be done
be
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by
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organaizing
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organising
 charities and
awarenerss campaings
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awareness campaigns
to
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for
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the
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apply
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society
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 in order to reduce the consequences of the
poverty
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 issue.
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