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he given tables show the amount of money earned by five European countries by selling Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in the years 1994 and 2004.

he given tables show the amount of money earned by five European countries by selling Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in the years 1994 and 2004.
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The table
show
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 the range of money gained by five European Nations in a period of five years. It is noticeable that
UK
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 had
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enormous growth, increasing their wealth by almost a tenth in 2004, compared to their original earnings in 1999 for both bananas and coffee, consolidating a strong trading industry for both of these products, with a combined gain of almost 67 millions of euros in 2004.
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, for nations like Sweden and Belgium a decrease was
showed
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 between 1999 and 2004, dropping their total wealth by almost a
halve
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half
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 regarding the trade of Bananas, albeit for these nations the coffee earnings were bigger, it only
aumented
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augmented
 to a tiny fraction in the range of five years. The trade for coffee left a major impact
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economy
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for
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 all these countries entering the
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however
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 the commerce for bananas for all the countries except the UK had
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little to no
favorable
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 impact
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countries
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country's
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 economies.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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