The best way to solve the traffic congestion in the city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is generally considered that industrialisation has had a negative impact on society for a long time,
such
as traffic
congestion
. As a result
, governments try to find a good solution by providing free public transport
. I agree that free public transport
is the best way to avoid the
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apply
traffic
congestion
.
Ther
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There
are
a variety of reasons why Change the verb form
is
people
should consider using free public transport
to prevent traffic
jams. Firstly
, free vehicle transportation can reduce congestion
in
roads. It is true most Change preposition
on
people
hate being stuck in traffic
because they don’t want to get depression
or annoyed. Replace the word
depressed
For instance
, 20 people
take the same bus to travel from home to their office at the same time instead
of using their private car. As a result
, it is good to decrease the traffic
flow. Therefore
, free public transport
can help people
to reduce congestion
in
the roads.
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on
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hand
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hand,
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a
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area which can help Correct article usage
the metamorphosis
for
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apply
people
to
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apply
breath a refresh
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breathe refreshing
air
in
the environment. Change preposition
into
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the ministry
ministry
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present
the greenhouse gas emission that Replace the word
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the private
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. By leaving their own can at home, a person can save up Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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to 15-kilogram
as a result
we have a
better-quality Correct article usage
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air
in the
society. Correct article usage
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small country if Correct article usage
a
people
prefer to use their Privat
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Private
vehicle
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vehicles
instead
of public buss
as soon as the Correct your spelling
buses
air
pollution could be increased.
To sum
up
one way to reduce Add a comma
up,
traffic
congestion
that
government should be expand free public Correct determiner usage
the
transport
for people
and encourage people
to use free automobile
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automobiles
city
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the city
area
. One way to Fix the agreement mistake
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reduce
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traffic
congestion
t upgrade and expand free vehicle transportation for people
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