Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How Can parents provide solutions?
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Task Achievement
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
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- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
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- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
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