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Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle material and avoid waste. Other believe that should be taught at home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #school #waste #home
In the modern era, teaching
children
 to recycle plays an important role, but there is a disagreement among the experts about the appropriate place for educating
the
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children
. Some believe schools are the best place for
children
 to recycle,
whereas
 others consider homes
are
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 the best location. In my
oinion
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opinion
, I agree with both
view
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 above.
To begin
 with, schools are
place
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 where having many experts and teachers can teach students how to recycle
effective
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.
Furthermore
, school programs can reach all
children
, ensuring everyone can learn the importance of recycling.
For instance
, there are many signs at school about different ways of
recycle
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 that students can access easily like printed trash cans
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and piece
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piece
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 of
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 taped to the wall. For each home, parents have a direct influence on their
children
's habits.
Therefore
, teaching at home allows for personalized learning experiences. To explain,
children
 can see
he
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 practical implementation of recycling in their daily lives through parent's activities. From the above analysis, recycling education should be a collaborative effort between schools and families to
mãimize
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minimise
 the impact on young minds.
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introduction
Your introduction should clearly present both points of view before stating your own opinion. Aim to be more specific and concise.
logical structure
Improve the logical structure by using clearer topic sentences and making sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea. This will help in guiding the reader through your argument more smoothly.
cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This enhances the flow of your essay and makes it easier to follow.
examples
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This strengthens your argument and showcases your ability to discuss the topic in depth.
conclusion
Your conclusion should summarize the key points discussed and reiterate your own viewpoint. Make sure it provides a clear and impactful ending to your essay.
language
Check for and correct grammatical errors and aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more vividly and accurately. Improving your language skills will boost your score significantly.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured environment
  • resources and expertise
  • comprehensive programs
  • direct influence
  • personalized learning
  • practical implementation
  • reinforcing the lesson
  • collaborative effort
  • maximize the impact
  • foundation
  • everyday applications
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