The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
The given graph illustrates how many abroad
visitors
tried to visit the coast, mountains, and lakes of a European country from 19987 until 2007. Looking into more details, in 1987 only 10
thousand
of
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viewers visited the lakes, which was the lowest number throughout the graph. After a significant growth, it reached roughly 75
thousands
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in 2002, before decreasing to 55
thousands
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in 2007. The graph
further
reveals
,
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the
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that the
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number of tourists
for
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visiting the coast was approximately 19
thousands
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in 1987.
While
this
number grew up until 1997 with roughly 28
thousand
,
but
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it rose marginally until 2002 with 21
thousand
visitors
, before jumping to 30
thousand
in 2007. Most of the overseas
visitors
enjoyed to go mountains with 40
thousand
visitors
in 1987. After a
steadily
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fluctuation until 1992 with 30
thousand
spectoters
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spectators
, it grew considerably until 2007, reaching 70
thousand
, which was the highest amount of
visitors
among
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all these years.
Overall
, not only did the figure of coast viewers increase but
visitors
to mountains and lakes
also
experienced considerable growth.
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