Band-9 Samples: In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In several countries, there are an increasing number of
people
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enthusiast
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to
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looking for their house or building’s history. From my perspective, the main reason is because
of
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individuals
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are avoiding
involved
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with criminal cases
such
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as land
dispute
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disputes
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and
home
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the home
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credit
system
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systems
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. So
that
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,
people
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can observe
this
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by searching
in
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on
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the internet and surveying
the
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neighbour
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neighbours
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. In
this
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essay, I will explain some reasons and the way
people
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research
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this
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. First and foremost, it is important for
individuals
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to know all about the land ownership status to
avoiding
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conflict either with the previous occupant or the third party. By
certainity
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certainty
of the land ownership status,
people
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can get easily feel
convinient
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convenient
to live in their house.
For instance
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, Raffi Ahmad,
as
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an Indonesian public figure, has written
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an agreement
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with some third party of his building in order to
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problems that
likely
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are likely
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to occur in the future.
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, another reason is home credit system that really popular among
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household
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households
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because sometimes it
make
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people
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feels
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insecure anytime
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while
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the
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strangers come to their house.
Due to
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that condition,
individuals
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usually prevent
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this
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case by knowing the origin of their
bulding
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building
. Apart from the reason why
people
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become
enthusiast
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enthusiastic
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with
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about
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that, there are some actions that
individuals
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can do to observe it.
Firstly
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,
individuals
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can
browsing
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be browsing
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from the internet and do some deep learning in order to
ranging
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their knowledge about the history of their own buildings. Align with that, asking some questions to the neighbour and
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getting
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the random sample answers from it
also
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helped
people
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to
understanding
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understand
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how their houses are built.
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, by doing all of
this
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,
slow
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slowly
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but
sure
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surely
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,
people
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can realise
about
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the origin of their houses
overall
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, and get all the answers to their curiosity all
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time. In conclusion, I once again reaffirm that understanding the origin of
building
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is important to
people
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that
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who
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live in it, because
of
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for
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some reasons including
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convinient
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convenience
one
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apply
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. As long as the internet, social media and
neighbour
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neighbours
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can help them, it can be easy to do
the
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comprehensive research for
this
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.
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