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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.
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The information about the
number
 of visitors who explored
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the caribbean
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caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
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islands
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while
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during
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 their stay on the
cruise
 ships is depicted by the given line graph. The information is calibrated in the form of
millions
.
Overall
, the most striking feature of the given chart is that the maximum
number
 of travellers
prefferd
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preferred
 to stay on the
island
,
while
 comparatively less interest was shown by the tourists to book
cruise
 ships in the initial years. Taking a cursory glance, it can be clearly manifested that staying on
island
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the island
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 was the first choice of visitors than its
couterparts
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counterparts
 starting from an initial figure of just above 0.5
millions
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million
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 in the year 2010 which later stayed constant for the next
one
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apply
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year. Following that, travellers on the
island
 continued to
rose
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rise
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 gradually before suffering a plateau from 2013 to 2015. Moving to
further
 details, the
number
 of explorers on
the
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apply
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cruise
 ships
were
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was
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 0.5
millions
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million
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 in 2011, and
then
 decreased and reached
at
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apply
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just under 0.05
millions
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million
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 in 2012.
Moreover
, the
number
 of vacationers in 2013, starting again from 0.5
millions
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million
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 noticeably soared and eventually became equal to the
explorers
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number of explorers
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 on
cruise
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cruises
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 between 2015 and 2016. In the year 2017, there
is
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was
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 a significant difference of 0.5
millions
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million
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 between the people who like to reside on the
cruise
 and
who
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those who
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 like to stay on the
island
.
However
, the total
number
 of individuals on the
island
 of
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the caribbean
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caribbean
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Caribbean
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 continued to grow
till
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to
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 3.5
millions
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million
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 in the given time period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, cruise, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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