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The pie chart shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.

The pie chart shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
The chart
give
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gives
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 information about the percentage of citizens who
living
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lived
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 in some
types
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type
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 of
proverty
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poverty
property
 in the UK in 2002.
It is clear that
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 Sole
Parents
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 had the biggest percentage
about
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of
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 citizens living,
following
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followed
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 by Single without
children
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.
By contrast
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, Aged
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Couple
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 had the lowest
shared
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.
Moreover
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, there is not
noting
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nothing
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different
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difference
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 between the biggest and the lowest figures
noticable
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noticeable
 in
this
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 chart.
To begin
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 with, the sum of
proportion
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the proportion
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 of Sole
Parents
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 and Single without
children
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 took
hafl
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half
 of total citizens living in the UK.
On the other hand
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, the figure rate for Sole
Parents
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 and
Couple
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 with
children
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were
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was
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 less than a fifth,
while
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 the percentage of
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couple
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couples
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 without child it was less than 9
percent
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.
However
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, the largest segment accounted
a
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for a
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fourth was Sole
Parents
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 without
children
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,
was
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apply
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26
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percent
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per cent
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,
following
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followed
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 by the second largest part
was
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apply
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Single without
children
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 about 24
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percent
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per cent
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, less than 2
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percent
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per cent
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.
In addition
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, Single aged persons and Aged
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Couple
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Couples
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 were
two
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the two
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 categories that had
lowest
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the lowest
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 segment, with just 7
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percent
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per cent
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 and 5
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively,
sum
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the sum
a sum
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 of
categories
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the categories
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 accounted
less
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for less
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 than a tenth of
total
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the total
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 chart.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parents, children, couple, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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