Today more and more people are using mobile phone and computer. Thus, the communication ability is losing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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improving
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meeting with new people
. Nowadays some people
argue that if person spend their time on electronic devices. they will decrease communication
skills. I strongly disagreed
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disagree
this
argument because social media can enhance communication
.
To begin
with, many people
have a lot of electronic devices for communication
. For example
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phones
Thus
, they can improve communication
when compared with traditional methods like letters. In the
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technology
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This results
people
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every time that they want by calling other Wrong verb form
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people
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relation
like long-distance relationships.
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In addition
, The major impact to
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on
communication
is technology
development like smartphones. One of the companies in the USA that encourage these
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this technology
these technologies
technology
is Apple company. They generate technology
called Face time
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FaceTime
This
technology
can talk in the
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and can show Correct your spelling
real time
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talking
Moreover
, the
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network
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networks
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are
people
as they can meet or chat with old friends. Although
people
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devices more than real situations. but can not Replace the word
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reduce
communication
performance.
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new technologies like smartphones or social network mobile applications assist Correct article usage
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to enhance
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people
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people's
communication
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