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In these latter days, It is generally considered that the rapid mass transit ought to be invested by authorities. Meanwhile once are of the opinion that the fare cutback ecological protection are advised to dedicate the budget. To provide a reasonable price and reduce contamination.

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In these latter days, It is generally considered that the rapid mass transit ought to be invested by authorities. Meanwhile once are of the opinion that the fare cutback ecological protection are advised to dedicate the budget. To provide a reasonable price and reduce contamination. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument. On the one hand, a multitude of people suppose the
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 are advised to divert to quick public transport. Owing to the fact that employing speedy transport leads to reduction of traffic jams. Citizens will
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 the
mean
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 of getting places fast
instead
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traffic congestion. As
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 result of that the indication of applying
a
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car will be increased.
On the other hand
, investing
into
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 various side of mass transport
such
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 reducing the charge or protecting the environment. If the fare will be cheaper individuals can be attracted cause of
this
 and start utilising mass transit broadly. There is a known fact that auto can fit barely four or five people
while
 bus
ifrom
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from
fourty
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forty
 to fifty individuals. When residents are not able to use
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 extensively
due to
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that
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the level of exhaust gases will diminish.
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, both methods can be
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of
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 using
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 by humans less. Eventually, the air
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 indicator will decrease since there are little as possible exhaust gases.
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Try to avoid vague or overly general statements. Be more specific in your introduction and conclusion to clearly present your stance on the issue.
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Organize your ideas more effectively by using clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph. This will help guide the reader through your argument.
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Include more targeted examples to support your points. Real-world examples or statistical data can greatly bolster the effectiveness of your argument.
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Work on the clarity of your argumentation. Ensure that your essay has a clear stance and that all supporting points directly relate back to the main argument.
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Revise your essay for grammatical correctness and clarity of expression. Avoid using phrases that seem awkward or incorrect, and ensure your sentences convey your ideas clearly and accurately.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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