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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given chart demonstrates statistics about the sale of
five
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 various products or
service
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services
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, namely,
food
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/drinks/tobacco; clothing; leisure/
education
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 in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and
Turkey
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 for a one-year period. Looking at the
overall
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 structure, it is obvious that the most preferred product was
food
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 by the huge proportion of
population
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the population
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 in each country.
Accordingly
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, clothing was less preferred compared to
food
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 consumables, but not less than leisure/
education
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 since it has the
least
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lowest
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 ratio of preference in all given
countries
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.
Food
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/Drinks/Tobacco has the highest
rate
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 of consumption in all
five
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countries
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,
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Turkey
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with Turkey
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 being the first with having 32.14% consumption
rate
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. After
Turkey
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, Ireland comes in second with 28.91%, Spain with 18.80%, Italy with 16.36% and in the
last
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 place, Sweden with
the
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a
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 minimal
rate
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 of 15.77%. The national consumer expenditure for
leisure
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the leisure
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/
education
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 section is 4.35% in
Turkey
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, which is higher than every other country
in
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on
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 the list.
Whereas
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 a very small part of
population
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the population
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 in Spain has expenses over
education
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, with
the
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a
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rate
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 of 1.98%, the lowest
between
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among
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 all
five
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countries
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.
Clothing
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The clothing
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/Footwear consumption
rate
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 is around
five
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 and seven
percent
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per cent
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 in every country,
while
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 the population in Italy has more fondness for clothing than the other
countries
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, which makes 9.00% in statistics.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, food, education, turkey, countries, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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