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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given chart demonstrates statistics about the sale of
five
 various products or
service
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services
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, namely,
food
/drinks/tobacco; clothing; leisure/
education
 in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and
Turkey
 for a one-year period. Looking at the
overall
 structure, it is obvious that the most preferred product was
food
 by the huge proportion of
population
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the population
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 in each country.
Accordingly
, clothing was less preferred compared to
food
 consumables, but not less than leisure/
education
 since it has the
least
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lowest
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 ratio of preference in all given
countries
.
Food
/Drinks/Tobacco has the highest
rate
 of consumption in all
five
countries
,
Turkey
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with Turkey
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 being the first with having 32.14% consumption
rate
. After
Turkey
, Ireland comes in second with 28.91%, Spain with 18.80%, Italy with 16.36% and in the
last
 place, Sweden with
the
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a
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 minimal
rate
 of 15.77%. The national consumer expenditure for
leisure
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the leisure
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/
education
 section is 4.35% in
Turkey
, which is higher than every other country
in
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on
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 the list.
Whereas
 a very small part of
population
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the population
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 in Spain has expenses over
education
, with
the
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a
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rate
 of 1.98%, the lowest
between
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among
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 all
five
countries
.
Clothing
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The clothing
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/Footwear consumption
rate
 is around
five
 and seven
percent
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per cent
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 in every country,
while
 the population in Italy has more fondness for clothing than the other
countries
, which makes 9.00% in statistics.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, food, education, turkey, countries, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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