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In the past, teachers were the main source of information, but today students have a wide source of information. So, teachers are no longer important in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

#teachers #source #information #students #education
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In the modern dynamic world, an increasing number of people assume that there is no demand for teachers as it used to be
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 since
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 can access a wide variety of
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sources
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. From my perspective, I completely oppose the given idea for a number of plausible reasons. ​First of all, I believe the
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sources
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 that
students
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 can access are not always reliable. The main
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 source is considered to be the World Wide Web,
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,
internet
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 these days.
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 invention can be quite helpful in some cases, but the fact that almost everyone can add
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 or make some amendments
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 makes it unreliable. In
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 case,
students
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 are easily exposed to fake news,
misinformation
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 which can lead them to
completely
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 wrong direction in their studies. ​
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,
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 are usually young, which means they are quite
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on
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 separating false and right, choosing their lifepaths properly and what to take as a source
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 their studies.
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, almost all
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 need
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extra help
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 as being directed on their studies. Say, a student came across
a false historical
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information
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 writing an important paper which would later help him get a scholarship. In
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, a teacher would surely guide him to use safe
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 rather than unreliable ones. ​In conclusion, I am of
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 that the guiding role of teachers
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 always essential for
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 even though
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 almost everyone.
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